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Today we will be editing and redrafting our work from Friday. I have attached today's WALT - work through the success criteria whilst reading Friday's writing and see how you can make your work the best that it can be. Below the WALT are some sentences that I have pulled out of the children's work, in class we will be talking about those and seeing how we can make these better before we edit our own work. 

I know this is a new way of doing things and we are finding it tricky but give it a go and see how you get on. 

Remember - our writing in this piece of work is in the first person - you are Weevil and it is you that is on the journey. You will use the pronoun I and, as the event has already happened, you will be writing in past tense. 


Your writing needs to include you telling the reader that you -

  • Went on a journey on a boat.
  • You did an activity to pass the time.
  • You made friends with a bird. 


This piece of writing is not in the original story, we are adding it to the original text. 


I look forward to seeing your work later. smiley