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Today we will be writing about the surroundings and thinking about effective language.


Learning Objective: To write effective sentences for our story.


Steps to Success: Sounds/ Extended Metaphor, Onomatopoeia, Repetition for effect.


Learning Chunk 1


Think about the words you would usually associate with music. 

Here are some I thought of: choir, orchestra, symphony, echo, harmony, melody, tune, lullaby, staccato, chorus.

If you can think of any more, add them to the list. 


Next, think about aspects of the environment that you could pair with these words e.g. a harmony of birds, a symphony of waves, a chorus of gulls.


Gather a bank of ‘enticing’ verbs e.g. beckoning, luring, enticing, attracting, pulling, drawing him in.


Use the vocabulary you have gatheres to pair up environmental factors with musical aspects and use an enticing verb with it.


Here is mine: A harmony of birds beckoned him closer. A symphony of waves called him towards the blue. The breeze was a lullaby enticing him nearer.



Learning Chunk 2


Think back to Monday when you looked at various metal objects and use the sounds you wrote down to gather an onomatopoeic word bank – e.g. clang, clank, tink, crash, bang, bish, bash, jingle, clink, ching, smash, wallop.

If you can't remember how the metal sounded, you could find something at home to hit and write down words which remind you of the sounds you make.


Next, gather a bank of ‘falling’ verbs. Here are some of the ones I could think of: tumbling, toppling, plunging, crashing, plummeting, diving.


Now, you can write a sentence to describe the sound of the Iron man falling down the cliff and the sounds it made. Open with three ‘ing’ verbs and choose three onomatopoeic words to repeat.


Here is my example: Toppling, tumbling, stumbling, the Iron Man fell down the cliff. Clang! Clang! Clang! Clink! Clink! Clink! Clank! Clank! Clank!

Learning Chunk 3


Watch this video showing the cliffs over the sea. Make a list of as many environmental aspects as you can see.

Cliffs of Moher by drone

Here are some of the aspects I could see: rock, stone, moss, grass, ledge, shard, rubble, sand, pebbles, beach, seaweed, water, waves, shells, rock pools, snags.


Think about when the Iron man fell and use repetition for effect, in groups of three, to magnify the tension of his fall.


Here is my example: Rock to rock, ledge to ledge, snag to snag, the Iron Man fell. Moss to moss, shard to shard, rubble to rubble, he plunged. Pebble to pebble, wave to wave, shell to shell, he landed.


Review and edit your sentences and send them in to the class email.