To write effective sentences for our story.
Steps to Success:
Complex sentence (relative clause)
Learning Chunk 1
Listen to the video of Hogarth entering the woods (without watching the clip) and make jottings about all
the noises – footsteps, owls hooting, twigs snapping, branches creaking.
Can you add any extras from your imagination?
Now watch the clip, with visuals.
Gather a bank of ‘looking’ verbs and adverbs – watched, looked, stared, studied, quietly, silently, intently.
Replicate the sequence used to introduce the Iron Man at the beginning of the story.
Here is my example: Hogarth watched. Hogarth watched anxiously. Hogarth watched anxiously but intently. He
heard the leaves rustling nearby, twigs snapping under his feet and the wind whipping against the branches.
Learning Chunk 2
List animal/creature sounds in a woodland – owls hooting, foxes screaming, hedgehogs grunting, rabbits thumping, bats flapping, birds squawking.
Now gather a bank of general sounds that are loud – aeroplanes, thunder, trains, drums, horns, class of children.
Compare one of the animal sounds to something loud, adding extra description.
My example: The hoot of an owl was as loud as a high-speed train, blasting its horn before rattling through a tunnel.
Learning Chunk 3
Look at the simple sentence…Hogarth
looked into the distance.
On large pieces of paper, write the sentence out. Put 2 commas in (to show that a relative clause can be inserted after the word ‘Hogarth’).
Add some relative clauses to the physical sentence – whose heart was pounding; who was terrified; who was breathing heavily; whose brows were clammy).
Use a relative clause to reveal Hogarth’s thoughts/feelings about the scary situation.
Here is my example: Hogarth, who was now regretting his decision, looked into the distance.